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Review:Ellerina says:
The parallels between this chapter and the first were really nice! Hearing how one sister thinks the other has everything is very typical of siblings, perhaps even more so because this particular situation is so complicated, and I like how you felt comfortable using a gap of a year and a half.

It isn't surprising that Teddy won't set a date for his and Victoire's wedding if he was cheating in her with Dominique at the time. Ugh, what a jerk! Lysander sounds lovely though. I love that he calls her 'Doe'. The only thing was that before you said his name, I thought he was Teddy. I'm not sure if this was intentional or not, but I thought I would mention it because it was a little confusing.

"You are still waiting, waiting, waiting. You are still engaged, still waiting, still just Victoire, still so, so guilty. You are still hidden, blended in with the shadows and the wallpaper." Loved this. I read this paragraph over a couple of times because I really enjoyed your phrasing.

Cheers!
Annie

Author's Response: Annie! :) Thanks so much for reviewing again, hon. I'm really thrilled you're liking this.

I was actually incredibly concerned with the gap of time, as I wasn't so sure that the reader's having to piece together the span of each sister's life within that year and half would work out well. :/ But hopefully it's not too ambiguous.

Now, you bring up another point of concern in the story for me. I tried to set it up to make it clear that, in fact, Teddy wasn't cheating on Victoire. In my head, they've got this completely ridiculous off-and-on thing going on and Dominique has just been this rock and this best-friend-whose-more sort of girl for Teddy during the "off times." Still sort of makes him a jerk, but oh well! XD

I'm glad you liked the phrasing, as those flowy sort of paragraphs with no real structure were written very much whilst I was particularly moody about something. :P They just sort of formed as I typed.

Thanks so much for the lovely review, Annie! Hope to catch up with you in the cbox soon. :)


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