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Review:Ellerina says:
Annie from the cbox over at TGS here. I love this story because of your use of second person! Also, it was really interesting the way you interspersed the dialogue with Dominique's thoughts. It gave this chapter really constant flow and a nice rhythm. You description was lovely and helped set the mood. I so sympathize with Dom! Teddy sounds like a real jerk, playing her like that. I'm interested to hear his side of the story, and Victoire's.

"Teddy and Victoire are getting married. You lost your dress, your mind, true love, your glass of red wine. You bear the weight of the world on your shoulders. There is going to be a wedding." These were some of my favorite lines. I thought they really summed up the chapter beautifully.

Lovely writing!
Annie

Author's Response: Annie! So lovely to hear from you, hon! Thanks tons for leaving a review. :)

I'm thrilled you like the second person, as it's not always much used or liked, but it's honestly one of my favorite narratives to use. It's good to hear that the flow and Dom's thoughts were working well too, as I was slightly concerned with the dialogue/description ratio. As for Teddy, is wasn't really my intention to make him out as a jerk, but it seems as though that's the way it's going! In my head, Teddy really did love her but in the end he sort of came to realize that the way it was supposed to be was him and Victoire.

Yay, I'm glad you like those too! The way I tried to write this was as though the sentences were short and erratic, flowing together almost hastily as though they were Dominique's thoughts. To hear that they summed it up, almost as though they're Dom's thoughts coming together as a whole, is really lovely.

Thank you so much for the lovely review, Annie! I so appreciate it. :)

Zinny


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