Report a Review

This service is designed to allow HPFF users to alert the staff about inappropriate reviews.

Review:theelderwand says:
"Imprisonment isn't effective, especially if your children are talented."

No truer words were ever spoken (unfortunately. LOL).

Sorry it took me awhile to drop by. Rest assured, I'm glad I did.

Brilliant tale. The slow reveals were exceptionally well done. First, that the pov is Hermione's, then, who the "hot" boy is were both perfectly executed. Well done.

And, it was a superb plot twist to misdirect to Seamus' son. Naturally, I immediately assumed it was Scorpius that was the object of the girl's affection once it was made clear the girl in question was Hermione's daughter. Nicely done to bait and switch; it's always good to keep us guessing!

I also like how you managed to keep all of this in canon; it seems to blend quite well with the epilogue in DH.

The humor (redefine both the terms "conniption and "fit") and Hermione's subtle angst (she's only nine!) were well turned.

A great one-shot.

Author's Response:
Hey! Thanks for dropping by. Your words are too kind!

I'm glad you enjoyed the reveals. I certainly amused myself by them! I was one of the readers who was surprised by the eventual R/Hr pairing in JKR's later books, so I thought it would be fun to mirror it here, especially since it would be an additional point of confusion for 'mom'.

I know all good stories have to include some kind of conflict. That was something I wasn't sure I had enough of to make this a complete piece. So it's nice that you commented about the 'subtle angst', because that's all that was really warranted here. I have an awful time putting characters in bad situations... I guess I'm just too nice. Working on that tho'.

Your review is most appreciated! I love that you stopped by to take a look!


Your Name:
Reason for this Report:

Examples:
  • The review is offensive.
  • The review is spam or chit-chat (not actually a review).
  • The review was double posted.
  • The review has formatting problems.
Repeat the number: 877
Submit Report: