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Review:butterbeergal says:
That was really very entertaining!

I never thought the day would come when I could picture Hermione as a mother. In the other next gen fics I've read, the Hermione in my mind was the same one in Deathly Hallows. But with yours, this was the first time I actually thought of her as a mother, as someone who had a husband, and not the awkward braniac we're all too familiar with. I guess it's safe to say, then, that with regards to voice, you did a fantastic job. And Ginny seems like a very hip mother here, I like it. Their dialogues were very funny and I could actually hear the banter in my head. I caught myself laughing more than once. Rosie, too, was adorable! I really liked how you managed to make this seem so innocent and genuine and not at all contrived and corny.

My favorite moment by far was this:

a teenaged drugged up... pregnant..." I tried to think of something worse than that... "...school drop out because her mother is a heartless prude.

Trust Hermione (and only Hermione) to think of being a school drop-out as something worse than a drug addict. It reminded me of that moment in Sorcerer's Stone when she told Harry and Ron that they could have gotten themselves killed or worse, expelled. Haha! Very nice.

Sneering skinny boy - that, by far, is the funniest thing I've heard in relation to Scorpius Malfoy. Now every time I read about him, sneering skinny boy will pop into my head.

Technically, I identified only minor issues of punctuation and capitalization, especially where the dialogues are concerned. But they weren't too distracting and they didn't affect the humor of your fic.

You've really managed to come up with something so authentic and believable, like something you've actually experienced. I really enjoyed this, Pixileanin. Good job. Thank you so much for requesting a review.

Cheers,
G

P.S. Please accept my sincerest apologies for being so horribly late in leaving a review. No excuses. Again, I'm so sorry.

Author's Response:
Wow. Thanks a bunch for your stupendous review!

I always saw Hermione as over thinking things, so I figured, she would probably continue that trend as she matured. And it seemed feasible that Ginny would be a more 'hip' (as you put it) mother with all her sibling experience.

Your favorite moment was indeed a mirror of the Sorcerer's Stone. :) I couldn't pass it up!

I'm glad you liked the "sneering skinny boy" description. I had a difficult time finding simple language for Rosie's playmates that would distinguish them from each other and still be meaningful.

I'll look into the punctuation issues, and I also noticed that the paragraph spacing isn't to my liking in some places. Thanks for the heads up.

I haven't read much early childhood Next Gen, so it seemed like the perfect place to play around. I'm so glad you enjoyed it!


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