Hi, icefire_lioness here with your review. :)
Okay, first off - WOW. The last sentence/paragraph made me choke up a little. :) I really like that repeated phrase, too, it works very well. Usually repetition means things lose their weight, but it's done the opposite in this case.
Now, I know I said I don't like angst, but sometimes one must make an exception (!) and this is definitely it. This is a very powerful piece; incredibly well written (gosh, I've been so lucky - all the people asking for reviews so far have been so talented!) and your character descriptions were just...brilliant.
I do love the twins so much, and this fic really bought home to me why. Their love for each other; all-encompassing and powerful, is so strong that they've built this bond between themselves that things like death, pain and suffering could never break. And you basically just wrote a fic that outlines that in brilliant clarity. I love it.
If this isn't the kind of thing you usually write, then you must be INCREDIBLE at your normal stuff. :D I have to say it took me until about...the third part where you write:
Yes, there are much more fearful words than silence. Words like *alone*.
It took me until then to really sit forward and feel like this was something special. That isn't to say that the first part was badly written (it wasn't, at all), it's really just that I'm not used to being into angst. And that's the thing, here - you got me so involved in this story that I forgot I don't generally like this genre and began to think about how much it moved me. Which, really, is a sign of incredible writing.
You've done an amazing job, and I sincerely mean that.
Having said that, there were a couple of errors I noticed (very small, but I'm a nitpicker):
'unexplainable' should actually be 'inexplicable'
'acclimated' should be 'acclimatised'
And that's it! Dear god, girl, that's the worst I can come up with! Well done.
Good luck with your writing in the future!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading this and reviewing! I have to say your reviews have made my week MUCH nicer!
To win you over to this fic, one who doesn't like angst, feels like a very high honor. It was really, really difficult to write. I've never spent so much time on a fic, moving things, changing phrases and words around, etc. I'm incredibly humbled you gave it such high praise!
As for my regular stuff, I'm not sure about the incredible part. It is much more normal and mundane than I tried to be with this fic, but I appreciate the sentiment just the same! Thank you!
It really means so much to hear that the writing and the story sucked you in. Those are wonderful words to the ears of any author, and I'm still rather basking in the glow of this incredible review!
Thanks for the notice of the few typos. :)
And thanks so so so much for reading and reviewing!