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Review:Sleeping Paige says:
Eridanus,

Perhaps I should have read this one backwards. Nothing of your fault, of course, I just thought that things were mising. I like that this about Luna searching for the Fantanstic Beasts. That's definately in character for her. (I did not know that JKR actually wrote that book.) I don't think that the meteorite thing works, even for Luna. Especially, in the first passage, it seems you mention this meteor thing over and over again. At first, I thought that she had gotten hit by them, but that sounded too fantasy.

I must say that after that confusion, I liked that she was doing things like working with Rolf on projects. The point about him being an older researcher is interesting because there aren't that many who are as weird as she. I can see they ended up together while spending their lives researching. Xeno would be proud.

I like the seing scene. That was down-to-earth. What can I say? I like differents stories. One thing that I would pay attention to, other than that frst passage, is how you mention the bruise. Instaed of it just being therere, it should slowly deteriorarate her body. I like thst she dedicated her life to this.

Show that.

Please respond and return the favour,

Sleeping Paige

8/10

Author's Response: Hello Sleeping Paige,
Well, if you'd read it backwards I suppose it would have defeated the purpose if me writing in reverse chronology, but it's helpful to hear your opinion on it anyway. Yes, JK has written quite a number of little companion books for the series, and since Luna turns out to be a Magizoologist I thought it was only fitting that I went along with that theme. I'll try and clear some of that confusion about the meteor up, but I hope you don't mind me asking why exactly you thought it didn't work?

Yeah, I couldn't really help mentioning him :P. It was too tempting. Yes, I suppose I thought that if he'd been around the same age as her then they would have found each other at this point, unfortunately this fic is a bit AU in the respect that they never really get together. Yes, I dare say he would have been.

Luna has a carefree, uninhibited nature and I'm glad that I was able to project that though the playground scene during the story. Do you mean the poison? I think I showed that it slowly spread through her body, but I'll check up on that.

Thank you so much for taking the time to review with all your opinions.


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