Celeste, first let me start off by saying that you asked for 'harsh' in your review thread, and I am afraid that I'm going to have to let you down. I cannot find anything to critique about this. From the banner to the summary to the story itself... Everything was so beautiful and lovely and just wow.
I loved the reverse chronology. It's such an original concept, and it really added more depth to the piece. It gave the reader a chance to look at everything from a different perspective. I know that, by reading this twice, I was able to pick out a few things that I wouldn't have noticed if I had only read it once.
'Just go,' he says simply and just live and just be so much more. For every tear she will now shed, she will smile a thousand times more, live a thousand times longer.
It was brilliant little one-liners like those that added something more to the one-shot. It got me thinking: is there something wrong with Teddy? Something that could potentially harm Rose, even? With that single line, you added a whole new dimension to the piece, a second layer for the reader to analyze and pick apart. With Skyline, you've proved that one-shots are more than just bits of fluff that a reader can glide through. Here, you actually need to think.
Your description, as always, was beautiful and envy-inducing. In fact, everything was amazing (as you can probably tell from all the italics and praise littering this review).
My only little critique is that, when reading top to bottom, the ending was left kind of open and vague. But, come to think of it, I actually liked that, since it allowed the reader to formulate their own theories and stuff, so that's not really critique at all :)
So, now that I've pretty much typed up a novella in this box-thing, I'm going to pick up my jaw off the floor and leave. I'm sorry about being such a gushing fangirl, but I truly do love this. Excellent job, Celeste!
Author's Response: Zoey, I've been putting off responding to this because I just don't know how to. :P Really, this is such a sweet review. The gorgeous banner, of course, is Violet's and I love it too! It's what inspired the setting of this piece.
Um, I'm going to ignore the praise part. You're now officially added onto my crazy list as well. :P
It is kind of vague, isn't it? I tried adding more detail, but then it didn't work the other way anymore. :/
Thank you so much for reviewing, Zoey! Reading this made my week! (And I apologize for the late review!) ^___^