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Review:FannyPrice says:
I adore your Regulus; he's one my favorites to write as well. Both brothers are amazingly complex creatures, but people don't normally try to write Regulus and stick to Sirius, so Regulus hasn't been...ruined yet. Is that a harsh word, but I'm sure you know what I'm talking about, all those Marauder/OCs out there, yeah. You're reasoning behind his selfish behavior was very real, and while not excusing it, made it empathetic to the reader kind of thing...

Anyway, very well done. I like the italicized flashbacks and for the most part I think they flowed very well into the story. There were a few points where I thought the flashbacks were a little two jumpy or maybe just a little to close together. But, no, as a whole they were well done.

I think one of my favorite moments and when he is comparing his parents to each other and how they look so eerily similar and the allusion back to his earlier comments about how and his brother looked related. Eerie is right! Also, the metaphor with the embers and how he always smelled like the burned tapestry, almost like fate calling him to his death--a betrayal of what he used to believe. Very good.

Cheers,
Miranda

Author's Response: Geeek! I'm so glad you liked my characterization of Regulus. I know what you mean about Sirius being 'ruined'. Regulus is the less explored brother, which is one of the reasons I wanted to write a piece about him.

I always did have trouble with the flashbacks. I wrote them independently from the rest of this and sometimes I had a hard time working them in. I actually just started in on a rewrite of this, so I'll see what I can do to make them more cohesive.

Everyone seems to like that part! I've always thought it was really creepy that the parents were so closely related, but no one ever really mentions. And AhHa! "fate calling him to his death", that was exactly what I was going for, I just didn't know how to put it into words.

Thanks for your review Miranda!
Ella

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