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Review:Sarah_Bee says:
Susan, I am on the verge of crying (why is it everything you write makes me tear up?) This was so powerful and such an emotional read for me! It was...well, it was simply heartwrenching and so beautiful!

For a moment, I felt as though I was standing beside Tonks, feeling her pain. I think you captured them both so wonderfully. Remus is a very interesting character and hard to pull off well in my opinion. I think you capture his character extremely well!

I think this one shot hit me more emotionally in particular because I've dealt with deaths of close friends, as well as having to deal with relationships that could never work because the guy doesn't love me back the way i want him to.so I can really relate to Tonks in this one.

The ending was perfect. The way you brought back the image of the light again and again and entwined the lyrics of that song was just perfect. my favorite lines: "My open eyes seek your face and find their mark. I see your heart upon it, reflected in every line, every scar. I see your heart as I have never before, and I see that I was wrong.

I am dead, but the light is not out. It can never go out.

You must not let it."

all in all, great job Susan! It was a great read. I hope you write more things in the future! And I hope you write original fiction as well because your hpff is absolutely flawless and supercalifragilisticexpialidocious. :)

and Alora's banner is simply fantastic! It fits perfectly with the story! (course her graphic work over at TDA is always jaw dropping amazing).

Author's Response: Alora's banner fits so perfectly, and I knew I couldn't make one that would work better, even if I tried to include Remus somehow. Of course, it's brilliant to have another of her banners (I love collecting those of various artists ^_^).

Anyway, thank you for this glorious review, Sarah! I love the long ones, even though it seems to take me forever to get to responding to them. That I made you cry is both great and horrible, and I'm sorry that you did (even though it means that the story worked emotionally, which makes me glad). That these emotions are relatable is even better - it's actually not something I thought about when writing.

The characters were strange to write, as they turned out differently from how I wrote them in another one-shot, and I wasn't at all sure if they were to canon. Remus is hard to pull off, definitely one of the most difficult to write, and that's partially why I made him so distant in this story. It's easier to paint the shadow of him than try to get into the details.

The ending I had re-written to bring the song into it more and to make it a "happier" ending (or at least less depressing :P), so it's fantastic that you liked this version. Re-reading what you quoted, I have to admit that it is moving to picture that moment when they see each other, just before she dies.

Thank you again for reading and reviewing this, Sarah. It means a lot to hear from you. ^_^


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