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Review:Pookha says:
I love drabbles and short pieces, especially when they are as well done as this. A lot of people will tell you that you can't write a coherent story in 500 words, but they're wrong. You do a beautiful job setting the tone of this story with the descriptions of the seascape and how they relate to Teddy.

The flow of the story seems very natural and the descriptions that you use are simple but powerful. I like the ending, as well. It's really left up to the reader to decide whether or not take it at face value. Did Teddy really die on the water, or is it just metaphor for what Rose is feeling? You do a good job showing ambiguity there.

I can't say a lot about development, because that's one thing that a drabble doesn't do well, but it does catch a snapshot of a moment in time.

This was a very nice read and I even overcame my aversion to second-person writing. Usually I find it experimental and off-putting. I think the reason I could tolerate it here was because it was short and beautifully described.

Author's Response: I love drabbles and short pieces too! It's not that common to find someone who does actually. I'm glad you think this was done well :D. All of the participants in this challenge have proved that 500 words is enough to form a coherent story

Thank you! I try never to overdo it on descriptions, otherwise I find my stories have no substance whatsover (although they still seem to go that way).

In my mind, Teddy did drown, and I wrote it with that as the backstory. It could be interpreted any way you want though.

Yeah, second person can be a lot to take sometimes. It is very experimental, but it's the way this story came out.

Thank you so much, this review made my day! :D

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