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Review:VampireKisses says:
Hey, Mids! It's Kristen ^_^. How's it been going? Did you get my PM? (sorry if that was going too far, I just thought it would be cool to know what general area to look out for Mids in Real Life xD) Anyway, I saw this in the "New Story" thread and I was just like, "must read now!"

And so I did.

It was very, very well written with an enticing plotline. I can't get enough of the dark/horror stories that focus more on the psychology than the blood and gore. I just find those more frightening, and not to mention, dynamic. How many horror flicks that are drenched with blood and people's brains have that one black guy who goes out for a pee and never returns, or the blonde bimbo who asks "Who's there?" before getting ripped to pieces by an axe or chainsaw?

This story was wholly original, and it brought up alot of questions to me. Was Scorpius REALLY dead, or was Louis jusy psyching himself into thinking he was? Was there a face in the mirror or was Louis just plain crazy from the pressure he put on himself? I like how these questions are sort of left to the reader to interpret for themselves. I personally think Louis just had a few fries and his toy missing from his Happy Meal.

I thought it was interesting how the only dialogue was between Louis as the superego and Louis as the id fighting ownership over Louis' soul and the fragments of his sanity. It was all very paradoxical, how Louis kept trying make himself the good guy when in actuality he is also a black hat. Everybody else was mute. I think it added to the effect that this was ALL about Louis. Does that make sense?

I did notice a couple language cliches, though. In the one part you said "blanketed by dark clouds." It's not that big of a deal since it is really good, but I thought I'd just point that out. I think people fret too much about cliches; there should be an HPFF challenge where it makes you take a cliche and bend it to your will so it's original.

I'm so glad you wrote about Louis. I never see him here! It's always his sisters. What made you decide to do so? Plus, kudos on making him Hufflepuff. Yay for the Hufflepuffs! They need to have the spotlight too (as well as Ravenclaws) instead of being portrayed as their typical house qualities.

I can't wait to see what other stuff you'll come up with in the future, Mids, because if this is a sign of what's to come, I'll be pleasantly pleased ^_^.

Have a great day!

Kristen :)

Author's Response: Hi, Kristen!

Thank you so much! I'm glad you picked this one up, so to speak. =)

I'm not a big horror fan. I actually just started watching scary movies, and I prefer the clean ones. I prefer psychological thrillers, so I guess that's what comes out in my writing.

I'm not answering those questions because the cliffhanger of the possible answers is what makes it scary, I think. =)

Yes, that makes sense, and I appreciate you pointing that out. I made sure that the focus was on Louis's fights with himself. Thank you =)

I've never written about Louis before so that was kind of fun. =) I don't know why. I needed someone that would seem vulnerable and young, someone who would fall prey to this sort of guilt.

Thank you so much! I appreciate your reviews, as always ^-^

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