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Review:nextgenoration says:
Hi there. Ash here, from the forums. (:

Okay, so you have quite a few things to work out in this chapter. It was enjoyable, like for instance, I really like the way you portrayed Hermione and Ginny. But the grammar, spelling, and punctuation wasn't perfect. I was very confused with the tenses, especially. You switched from third to first without warning. I wasn't sure if this was deliberate or not. In any case, it was very distracting. Another thing you may want to look at is the 'Miss. Weasley'. You don't need Miss with a period. It wasn't a big deal but it looks better when things like that are cleaned up. (: I'm also a little confused as to what happened to Harry and Ron, haha. I'm sure it'll all be explained eventually but still, it threw me off a tad. Anyway, maybe if you just went through and edited a bit, then resubmitted, it would be even better. :)

Feel free to stop by my thread anytime!

cheers, ash

Author's Response: Thank you for your time. Yes, I am in the process of editing and resubmitting this chapter again.. :/ I guess I just didn't edit it like it needed to be. But thanks for being specific too! That helps a lot! Thank you again for taking the time to review this! :D

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