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Review:VampireKisses says:
MIDS! It's great to hear from you again! I've been so busy with school and everything (good busy, not bad busy - yes, I am a Ravenclaw for a reason xD) How are you?

This was interesting. You were right, I did like it. Alot.

Petunia and Severus...very unusual I must say, but then, I love unusual. What made you choose this pairing? I would like to point out though that in "Order of the Phoenix" I believe, Petunia remembers the Dementors because she heard Severus tell Lily...and if I remember, she was rather abhorred by his memory (and when she first meets him at the playground she freaked out). It's not a criticism or anything, since I'd take it as maybe Petunia was disgusted or embarrassed that she ever desired someone such as Severus. I just thought I'd point those things out. The way you set up her relationship to him was very realistic and relatable. I have my own flaws, like having cerebral palsy (on top of having brown eyes :P) so it was very easy to step into Petunia's shoes.

Speaking of Petunia, I think her voice is very strong in this piece, which is reinforced by the short sentences going into the long ones. But I don't think Petunia would be the sort to call Severus by a nickname like 'Sev'. Any nickname, really. She seems too formal and uptight; I would be shocked if she ever called Vernon "Vern."

The way you describe things are great. and the thing that tops this off is that, the way you describe things seem uniquely different than most writers here at HPFF. It's simple and clear but really deep. Your final line was beautiful, stark and symbolic. It perfectly showed the essence of Snape and Lily's relationship.

And praise you for your characterization of Lily! Hallelujah! Okay, I probably shouldn't be half so excited but I'm so pleased you took Lily and basically ripped out her innards for what they really are. I'm one of those readers who don't like Lily much at all xD I don't think she was a TRULY good soul as everyone raved about after her death. I just love the part where Petunia describes her as a black widow. How she is more like a Venus Flytrap than a Lily. It's a beautiful contrast between the green beauty and black terror. What do you think about Lily? Do you think Severus was not smart to love her?

I'm sure you got this alot in your other reviews, but I really liked how you twisted the whole "different is great!" notion and showed that being one of the many can be good possibly. How being different maybe weird or strange like the eyes of animals staring at you at night as you drive down empty farm roads. "But its another thing to look at someone average really look at them and see something even more special." It's so true! Looks fade with time and age, but what is on the inside, at its very core, never really change. I think the inside matters more than what is on the outside.

Very good piece. You should have more stream of conscious sessions :)

Love,
Kristen

Author's Response: There is no excuse for the lateness of this response, but I really do appreciate your review ^-^

I have always sort of thought that Petunia and Severus would be good together. I always pictured their relationship like this - Petunia pining over him but he is too busy focusing on Lily.

That's a good point. She probably wouldn't call him Sev. I'll keep that in mind for the future. Thanks =)

Thank you =) I've been working on saying exactly what I mean in the simplest way possible, and this story is a result of that experimentation. I'm glad to see it's working!

Haha, I'm glad I'm not alone! I didn't see her as a goddess of any kind in the series. I wasn't totally taken with her, you know? I wanted to explore some of her darker sides too, and I figured Petunia would be the perfect medium.

Thank you so much! I really appreciate your review ^-^


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