Hi dear! Amber here with your review. I normally am good about keeping up with the reviews. Sorry it took so long.
Well I'm surprised you made this a Harry abuse story. I've read a couple and I agree with you how he always get saved by the Weasleys/Snape. I've never read one longer than a chapter though, so I look forward to see how you handle it :)
I think that your plot is amazing. Having Fred and George find him was a smart choice, because not only are they a comic relief, but they have the capability of getting serious when they need to. Their mannerisms were on spot, especially when they decided that going over to Harry's wouldn't be against the rules. You made them the twins they are in the books, they completed each others' sentences, and practically thought the same things. Awesome.
When they found Harry in his room (chained up :(), I truly felt aweful. I mean, Jo didn't really go into detail about Harry's abuse...because it was a children's book. But the Dursleys did abuse him and we need to acknowledge it. And from harrys reaction, you portrayed it beautifully. I've never been abused, but I read a lot on it, and a lot of the signs he had reflected the signs of a neglected child. How he thought that everything was his fault, and how they 'always' did this. My heart bled when he was so pitiful, because I was reminded less of the champion Harry and more of the younger Harry. It's AU, but it's good :)
I laughed when Fred was purposefully making a mess in the kitchen. It is totally something I would do if I was mad at someone, so I really connected to it. And like Fred, I was extremely ticked when Uncle Vernon threw a fist at Harry. Poor Harry didn't deserve it :)
As far as characterisations go, I loved them. My only critique is your wording in some places...like:
Said he‚s got to back out of tonight‚s plans
He said that he can't go with us tonight.
Stuff like that. It wasn't that distracting; I just noticed it in a few places. Besides that, it was an A+!
Very good story. I have so many questions. Will the Ministry lock them up? What will happen with Harry? How will the Weasleys react?
Author's Response: First I need to say a gread big thank you for such a wonderful review! It rocked!
Secondly, I need to appologize for not responding to your review sooner. I am usually much better at responding in a timely fashion, but this is my busiest time of year and things got away from me. So sorry!
I never intended to write a Harry abuse story, but after reading so many of them that were either, as you said, abandoned, or had Snape doing the rescuing, I couldn't help it. The subject of abuse is so delicate and not one to mess with that I avoided it for a long time, but at the same time it's obvious by what JKR alludes to in the books that Harry was abused. I'm quite sure it never went to the extent I took it, but it was there. I wanted to explore what would happen if the people who DO love Harry, even if he doesn't always see, found out about his life at home.
You like my plot! Yes! I love Fred and George, and they are never given enough credit for caring about their family, a family I firmly believe they include Harry as part of. When I decided to write this story I just knew it had to be them that found him, so they could have the chance to show their protective side and not just their joker sides.
And yes, it was a rather heartbreaking scene, but I needed it to set up the rest of the fic. Glad you liked the characterizations! That makes me very happy!
Thanks for the pointers on my wording. Sometimes, when I'm writing dialogue, I leave words out because people leave them out when speaking, but when you actually read the sentence you're right, it looks funny. Thanks.
I should have the next chapter up soon, so I hope you'll come back and see what happens. Some of your questions will be answered there, but not all of them. Not yet at least.