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Review:shenanigan says:
Jane, this is absolutely lovely!

I was checking out (cough - not stalking - cough) your Author's Page when I stumbled across this, and the banner was so pretty and the summary was so intriguing that I just HAD to click. And so now, once again, I am in utter amazement at your writing - this entire thing was beautiful. The setting of the lavender field gave an almost dream-like sensation, and the way you described it ('a concerto of lilac and indigo') made me want to actually be there with Dominique and Victoire.

Speaking of which, I think you managed to characterize the two sisters really nicely, especially in areas like the second-to-last paragraph, where the reader gets a glimpse into the sort of naivety and innocence that both Dom and Victoire posses. A lot of times, most authors who write children in their story forget to adjust the dialogue/description/etc according to the ages of their characters, but you managed it perfectly.

Anyways, I really loved it, and even though the first chapter was short, it drew the reader in. So wonderful job, Jane, and I eagerly await the next update! :)

Author's Response: Hey, Zoey! Sorry for taking such a horrifically long time to respond!

Hahaha, do not fear, I completely stalk everyone on TGS :P. I think it may be something of a sickness. And let me just say that THIS BANNER IS MY LIFE AND JUST DFGBDFCSCVDV. This is the reason why UFG owns my life. This is the part where I get embarrassed XD. I'm absolutely thrilled that you like it though! Description is anything but my strong point, and some of this took quite a bit of thought, so it means a lot that you think it paid off.

It IS really difficult to write children. I don't know what I expected, but it's hard to get their dialogue right without it seeming stilted. However, I absolutely adored writing this! It took me out of my comfort zone a bit, but I love doing that and challenging myself. I just hope I can continue to show their progression in the next chapter. I suppose it's a bit of a coming of age story to a certain extent.

Thank you SO much for taking the time to read and review! I'm absolutely thrilled that you enjoyed it ^_^

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