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Review:Grapeback says:
Hi there! I am absolutely amazed at the intricacy of this story! Even though I don't want to admit it, when I saw that this only had one review, I wondered if it was good or not. I regret that now. You left me in awe by the end of it, and I had to read it again to make sure that I wasn't hallucinated. But I wasn't; you're just completely beast on the keyboard :p

I can truthfully say that I despised anything to do with Bellatrix as a main character, simply because no one characterised her right. I have little critique for this Bellatrix though, because you got into her mind (I didn't even know that it was possible) and wrote the story in a way that even I understood her.

Just so you know, for the first two paragraphs of the story, I was just like...yeah, it's a random victim; nothing special about it. As soon as I saw that she was torturing the Longbottoms, however, my face was like l 0 l. I felt my heart race. And as it continued, I couldn't stop reading it!

I love your writing style. It's really poetic and the repitition of Crucio was a smart thing to do! If JK had a spur of the moment and decided to write this scene, it'd probably be close to this. My only critique is that while we were getting into her mind, I expected it to be a bit more spontaneous and raw...if you know what I mean. And no, I don't mean for this statement to contradict the following paragraph.

There was a reason for this to be mature, I see. A lot of people can't stand reading it, but the torture scene was done well. Very close to bending ToS in fact (but not quite :p)

I'm favoriting it and becoming your loyal servant

Amber~

Author's Response: Thank you very much!! I'm really pleased you thought so much of it.

I don't read very much on Bellatrix mainly for the same reasons as you. & I've only written her once before, as Bellatrix before the Death Eaters and I really wanted to try my hand at the Bella we all know and see if I could do her at least a little bit of justice. Therefore, I'm thrilled that you thought I did a good job with her characterisation.

Being compared to JK!!! What an amzing compliment!! Thank you very much. I'm not sure how I decided to go with the theme of crucio, it popped into my head when I thought about Bellatrix, probably because of the infamous Longbottom torture. so it made sense for me to use them in this as well.

It was difficult to get into Bella's mind as I think she's rather far gone on the road to pscyho lol. Although she knew exactly what she was doing and was proud to do it for the Dark Lord and would do it all over again, I wanted to write about her reasoning with herself over what she was doing just to show the madness in her. I'm glad you thought the scene was well done, I didn't want to go overboard or to have it lacking, and I've never written something like that before, so I appreicate you commenting on that!

I'm really glad you enjoyed it. Thanks very much for taking the time to leave such a lovely review


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