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Review:Grapeback says:
Wow. I can not believe how awesome this story is. Not only is your writing top-notch, but as is your plot. Let me explain, shall I?

Okay, well first off, Harry is dead. Thank god (not in a bad way of course. I love Harry. Just not in fanfiction. People tend to muddle him up until you forget who he is). That is a major conflict in the story, and not one that the main characters- in this case Ron and Hermione- can overcome easily. Ron chanting about Harry not wanting to be famous just furthers my point :)

I noticed no POV and/or tense changes, so thatís excellent! Even though POV is rather hard to mess up, tense is something that most people tend to make mistakes on. You didnít though, so you get brownie points.

Hermione made me want to cry. I can not credit you for this line, but tell neutral that she did a great job on it.

But it wouldn't be long. He would be a name in a book in a chapter describing a dark and dreadful day. But the book would get old. Its pages would yellow and its spine would break. Heroes with more grandeur and fame than he ever had would rise. He'd just be a name people would swear on.

That line made me love this story. And after that line, I was hooked on every single word. It really captured Hermioneís mourning and infuriation. According to the Grieving Cycle, it is completely normal to have that so I would say good job.

When Ron walked through the door and admitted that he did not think Harry was a hero, I realized something major. He had grown up. We, as the most loyal of all Harry Potter fans, are so used to seeing Ron in a state of jealousy that we would shun this Ron if we could. Giving the circumstances however, I would have to say that it was a great move, because according to JK Rowling, she said that Ron would mature after one of his loved ones died (reason why she didnít kill off Mr. Weasley). Having him reach this self-actualisation was absolutely terrifying; I must admit that I felt like I was swimming in untraveled territory.

So if you may, I would like to share my predictions with you. I imagine that Ron will become suicidal/depressed and Hermione only wants his love. They will feel guilty about their attraction in light of Harryís death. After some emotional rollercoasters ahead, they will eventually succeed! That is just my hypothesis anyway ;p. Feel free to diss yo!
Absolutely splendid chapter!

Amber

Author's Response: Thank you for your review! I really appreciated everything you said, and I hope you're not disappointed at some of the plot revelations that come with the next chapters. This was one of my favorite chapters to write, and I think the Ron and Hermione interaction will the stuff I love writing most. I can't wait to do another chapter with them.

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