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Review:Miss Lily Potter says:
Hey! I'm here from the forums with your review. (:

I liked this. (: The ending wasn't really what I was expecting; After Victoire told her she was in love with Teddy, I expected Dom to realize it and go running to him. But I like how you did it, kind of the up-in-the-air, "I don't really love you, but it solves a lot of problems" way. (:

You asked about plot, and I have to say, I really like yours. It wasn't cliche, and the ending, as I said, was really enjoyable. (: I like how you've had Victoire as the calm, not flighty one, and Rose as the one who "takes men for granted".

I love your Dom; I've seen a lot of different versions of her, but I really like yours. (: I like her first speaking line, it really sets the tone for her personality and all that good stuff.

Now onto grammar things...

You had "It Welsh"--it should be It's.

That's really all I noticed, other then a couple of missing commas, but those weren't noticeable, really. (:

I love the use of the name Dwyn, and Dom's reaction to that. XD I like the non-elegant names, and that one makes me smile.

I really enjoyed reading this. (: Your ending was sweet, and the entire thing was a fun read. I'd be interested to see what else you've written; if you want, feel free to request for another story. :D

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm glad the ending was unexpected; I tried several different ideas out, but I didn't want both sisters to be in love with Ted at once, like they are in a lot of stories. JK left us with a potentially good love triangle, but now it's being overdone. As for Dom's personality, it was extremely fun. :D

Thanks for the grammar tips... I've just submitted a beta'd version of the story, with a few of my own edits, so it should be better.

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