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Review:Laugharama_llama says:
Melissa!

That was such an adorable story. Your execution was wonderful! I love how you switched between the two scenes through Audrey's thoughts! It was very James Joyce :)

Your detail was perfect! I could see everything happening and feel Audrey's emotions the whole time. I felt like I was in a play, as Audrey!

One thing I want to point out was that sometimes your writing got a little choppy. Like here, for example: "The night air is cold against my face. My eyes flutter open from a warm and peaceful sleep. The window is cracked open. The curtains flutter gently in the cool night breeze." But it wasn't like that throughout the whole story, only in some parts. I wasn't sure if I should have pointed that out though, because in your more recent stories, I haven't noticed that. So it's obviously something you've changed and fixed about your writing style! :)

I'm so glad I stumbled upon this! I've been looking for a sweet story because all I ever see anymore is angst! This was such a sweet story! I love how Percy asked her out too! *squee*

Author's Response: Awww. Hey Katrina!

Thank you so much for reviewing this. :) You are far too kind.

I have always pulled for Percy. I now he was a bit of a lousy character for a while, but I always hoped he'd come around. Many fanfic writers overlook him in the scope of the Weasley family.

Audrey is a huge mystery to everyone, so I figued, "Why not fill in the blanks?" I'm very glad you liked this and my description. I think the choppiness is more associated with my writing when it is in the present tense. :(

Angst is nice, but I love romantic fluff. It is very necessary to balance out all the heavy stuff...

Thanks dearie!
Melissa


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