Hi Deana *waves*. My geometry finals are over, and I thought I'd start the review fest off with one of your one-shots, which, by the way, is a very captivating read.
I really love what you've done with it. Everything we've read in Harry Potter...including this, could be up to so much reader interpretation, it would seem foolish not to write a story about it. And this is the first time I've read a story involving Draco in his sixth year.
So the plot is obviously based upon Draco's experiences in 'The Half-Blood Prince', so I'm not going to waste much time on it. You've done your research, and I'm very pleased with the outcome. The thing that makes this story good is the amount of emotion you put in it...
Draco's character is exceptionally good. Since I don't think you've ever done first person in AiNFiLaW, it was quite interesting to read. Of course, you did him wonderfully in "Love and War", but hearing the "I's" and the "Me's" just makes it more real. Anyways, you captured his personality beautifully- the anguish and anger he feels is totally him. Absolutely no criticism at all.
Also, adding Myrtle made my day. I think I've read one story with Myrtle in it, so it's really a rare occurence. You did her justice as well, with adding your own touch. It was flattering to see Myrtle so sympathetic =]]
I'll end this on a light note. There is absolutely nothing wrong with your story, and if someone tells you to change it, don't. You have a gift Deana. A very beautiful gift indeed.
Author's Response: Hey Constants!! Thank you so much for taking the time to read & review this for me! This was such a very pleasant unexpected surprise to wake up to! Sorry it's taken me so long to reply to it tho... Anyways, I really did do a lot of research for this one-shot, especially when it came to Moaning Myrtle, so I'm glad that shows! I guess emotion just seems to be a bit of a strong point for me, haha. (But I'm really NOT am Emo kid tho, I sear, haha!!) Sorry, that was random... moving on.
Nope. The only time I ever did first-person in 'Love & War' was in the Intro. I am also considering going back to that for the Epilogue as well, but that's a different story. We're not quite that far yet, lol! No criticism, really? You are so nice my dear!! *hugs* I'm happy you liked Myrtle. She was SO MUCH of a challenge for me to write! URGH! I mean, we barley know anything about her and it was just - well - quite the experience, let me tell you, lol! But it makes me SO extremely happy to know that people really do like her. It just shows that all my hard work really did pay off!!
I am so glad I didn't just scrap this and drop out of the challenge like I was going to. It's getting reviews like this that really help keep me encouraged. You are your own worst critic they say and, with this one-shot, that definitely was the case, lol! Thank you so much for all of the kind words friend! You are awesome, and rather gifted yourself I might add!! =)