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Review:Pretty Purple Pelican says:
It's me at last! :)

I noticed you were worried about religious themes! I don't think that's something you need to worry about, though I've totally been there. I was nervous when I posted my one-shot with religious themes, but in the end, I got pretty positive responses to it. I'm really excited that you chose a religious song for this challenge; I thought it was a pretty brave endeavor.

To begin with, I absolutely love the way that you've made Hugo the peacemaker. The way you describe his relationship with each member of the family was very enjoyable and sets the scene with a great characterization.Your story is so well-written, and it looks like you did a lot of research for this one-shot, and I really respect that. Your story really moves forward even though most of it is narrative.

"someone was always bound to be caught someone else snogging someone somewhere they shouldn’t be. " - That was a little bit confusing. I understand what you were getting, but the wording was a little bit difficult to interpret. Also, I was confused as to who would be kissing. They were all family, after all, unless there was infidelity going on.
"behind the desk pouring over the sc" - poring is the word you're looking for :)
(I'm just getting nit-picky here, but it's because your story has left me without much else to say.)

Absolutely lovely! I really enjoyed this story. It was so heartfelt and lovely. There are some little mistakes, but I was so wrapped up in the wonderful Christmas feeling at the end that I didn't even take too much note. Great job!!

Author's Response: Helo!

I'm so glad that you gave me a religious song to work with. I think that, overall, they are easier to really incorporate the true meaning of christmas into for obvious reasons. I was nervous about it, but thought that on a whole, it turned out well.

I fell in love with Hugo while writing this. His character is so under-written across HPFF. It's wonderful to know that you enjoyed his character. As a whole, I'm thrilled to pieces that you liked this one-shot. I didn't do much research for this fic, but am tickled pink that you think I did. :)

Oh... that sentance. Yeah. It was awkward. I know. :( I meant that the younger cousins were bound to catch the older cousins hidden away somewhere snogging their significant others or another cousin's significant others. (Similare to James catching Teddy on the platform) I am a fan of Molly/Teddy and could imagine a bit of infidelity. Nit Pick away!!! Criticism is always wonderful... I'll be sure to fix that up as soon as I can. :)

Thank you so much for such a wonderful challenge and fur leaving such a wonderful review. They were both lovely!
-Melissa


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