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Review:TwilightPrincess says:
Hi! Thanks for requesting ^_^ Sorry it's so late.

You asked me to touch on characterization and flow. The characterization I thought was very good. They seemed like stereotypes, but I think that's what you need for a story like this. The plot has already been determined, since it is a Christmas carol that has spawned from the biblical story, so the characters you used for the Harry Potter take on it need to be sort of flat. Your Harry Potter characters are stand-ins for the real people, so they can't really have too much mind of their own. Does that make sense? Also, I think it's good that the characters weren't too intensely dissected because the point of this piece lies in the idea of it, not the characters. The point was about Christmas, not about Hugo or any other character's PERSON.

Speaking of Hugo, he was a brilliantly constructed character. Although I said he wasn't as important as the main idea, which I still think is true, it was very easy to feel his emotion. I especially liked the bit at the beginning when he was reminiscing about how much he was missing. You described what he was feeling very well, and it was easy for me to sympathize with him. Good job.

The flow was also really nice. It had lots of nice transitions. I think what helped the flow was that it is based on a story that actually happened, so because it's essentially just a rewriting of the real story, the flow was better. Readers are sort of expecting what's coming next, so the story kind of reads itself, like you said it wrote itself. =)

Overall, a really touching piece. I really enjoyed reading it. Thank you for requesting!


Author's Response: Ilia,
First off, thank you for reviewing this. Late is always better than never. :)
Secondly, I do know what you mean about the characters. They are more like actors playing a pre-determined role than their own people. That being said, I'm very glad that Hugo came through well. He is of a very specific personality in my mind. It is good to know that he was easy to sympathize with. :)

Once again, thank you so much for taking the time to leave such a lovely review.

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