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Review:RonsGirlFriday says:
Hello Marina! I'm here with your review that you requested about a million years ago. XD You had only requested the first chapter at that point, but now that the fic is completed, I may as well read the whole thing - shouldn't be hard to do, since you've kept all the chapters nice and short!

And anyway, how can I NOT read on after this beginning? - Or, I should say, this ending! I love that you've started with an epilogue. It's an interesting decision, because now we already know how it ends, and now all that remains to be told is what led up to this conclusion - unless you've got some story twist down the road...but I'll just have to read on to find out!

I'm always entranced by your writing style. It's really lovely and genuine and pure - and in this case, with this story, it tells me so much about Molly right from the very beginning. I feel like I know her deeply already.

I also like that you seem to know how to use just the right amount of emotion and romance - it doesn't seem over the top or uber-sappy. Sometimes I find it hard to stomach really heavy romance and unrealistic outpourings of emotion. I think it shoes how talented you are, that you convey just enough emotion without crossing the line and becoming implausible.

Oh, yeah - and you also asked about tenses getting mixed up. As far as I could tell, your tenses are totally fine. I only found one line I think I would change:

For although she has pretended she has moved on, no man was ever good enough to match up to Teddy.

I think I would change the last bit to "no man has ever been good enough..." But that's a very minor detail. Other than that, I thought it was perfect.

Off to read the rest of the story!

xoxo
Melanie

Author's Response: Melanie, this takes my breath away. You're so embarrassing me right now, because of the blushing and the smiling, but this makes my life! Thank you!

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