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Review:Leigh Kelley says:
Saved by cigarettes? Now that's something.

Anyway, I must say now that this story was brilliant. Luna and Neville dying really came as a shock to me, but it only makes sense for them to die along with Vandy. Happy endings don't always work, and I doubt that it would have with this story. I mean, although Clyde survived, I don't really feel like it ended happily. He doesn't have the best of jobs, he's still smoking, and he's a mute. It did have a nice meaning at the end though, even if I don't see Clyde as the type of person to believe in a higher power. It does give him something though, as he himself said at the end.

Most of everything that happened over the course of this story was a surprise to me. I thought it would be this big old scene with death eaters and them trying to fight for their lives, but that would be all too easy. I'm glad that you took it out of the box, and had this whole mental aspect to the whole thing. It was just the four of them, no Voldemort and his followers, and it worked. I believed in everything you've written, even if the course of events happened in an unnatural short period of time. Who cares, really? It was a nice plot, and you allowed it to unfold beautifully.

Grammar-wise, you were pretty much perfect. I didn't find anything to pick on, so that's good. Your storyline flowed well, your characters had dimensions, and your writing was completely gripping. If I hadn't needed to leave yesterday, I would have read it all in one sitting. Great job.

~L. Kelley

Author's Response: I hope I sort of threw you for a loop with that. =P

Thank you so much! I'm so glad you liked the story as a whole. It was sort of a bittersweet ending for that reason. Clyde doesn't really understand that yes, he survived, but he has no one anymore. This whole story messed with my mind when I was writing it XD

I'm so glad I could surprise you! That's something I've been trying to accomplish with my writing, and it's so great to hear that I have done it =) Thank you so much! The mental aspect of it, I thought, was much scarier than being attacked by death eaters or demetors or something of the like. That's why I wanted to take the magic away from this story and show people how scary humans could really be.

Thank you so much! Your feedback has helped me so much. ♥


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