Report a Review

This service is designed to allow HPFF users to alert the staff about inappropriate reviews.

Review:Leigh Kelley says:
Well, someone just took a dive off the sanity bus. He's really losing it, and I had no problems feeling that. Clyde's thoughts were just so over the place, and it added to the atmosphere. Sometimes I was confused as to what's going on, but making sense of anything when I am having the direct thoughts of someone in a breakdown would be difficult. You really captured the mood well.

I don't like Vandy. At all. Even when he placed her on that pedestal I couldn't bring myself to like her. How can anyone be so perfect? And then she snapped, and I was like 'Oh!'. And now she just keeps on being mean to him, and it's like, 'Okay, I'm sure he got it already. Leave him alone.' I guess it's his current state that has me not caring for her character much. I feel sorry for him, no matter how crazed he is, and doesn't have any kind of support. But, he can't be the only one suffering, of course, so I don't know how he can get that shoulder to lean on when all the others probably need one too.

Just curious. How comes there hasn't been a search party for them yet? Wouldn't they have realised by now that four students were missing? They have their wands, so they know that they boarded the trains, right? And since they didn't get off it, wouldn't it be logical to be out looking for them? Then again, maybe they are, and just don't think to check the train tracks. Who would? Ah, I dunno.

Reading on!

~L. Kelley

Author's Response: XD Yes, I suppose that's an accurate way to phrase it. This going-crazy, helter-skelter part of the story was really fun to write because if something felt wrong, it belonged. Isn't that weird? It messed me up a little bit; it was difficult to go back to writing normally after this XD But I'm really glad you liked this part.

Good, you're not supposed to like Vandy. XD I suppose the relationship between Vandy and Clyde could have been extended so that this part was more dramatic, but I guess it's too late now =P Again, I'm really happy to see how much you're thinking about this story. It means a lot to me.

I suppose logically, that would happen. That was sort of a trap I'd set for myself with this story. I really wasn't sure how long it took for the train to reach Hogwarts once it left the station, but I knew that withdrawal needed a healthy amount of time for it to set in. You make a good point, but I appreciate that you're using your imagination for this story =P

Thanks again!

Your Name:
Reason for this Report:

  • The review is offensive.
  • The review is spam or chit-chat (not actually a review).
  • The review was double posted.
  • The review has formatting problems.
Repeat the number: 904
Submit Report: