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Review:Leigh Kelley says:
Nice dream at the beginning there. It felt so real, and I was so sure that it was a flashback or something similar. Clyde's little statements, like the one after he says 'I ran', just gave me that feel. It was written so well, and had me on the edge of my seat the entire time. It was just that gripping, and demanded that I read on to find what happened. You definitely got the horror bit down there. To discover that it was just a dream was actually a relief to me.

You have really got a feel for your character. The same voice I heard in the first chapter, is still here now. He swears a lot, but that's just him. I like how he recognises that he's not the greatest guy, and therefore doesn't want to mess with Vandy because he fears corrupting her. It's kind of sweet. Somehow I feel that she's not as pure and innocent as he seems to think she is.

I just knew taking the wands before they boarded the train was a bad thing. I thought something would happen on the train, because teachers don't travel to the school like that, right? The only adults on the train are the driver and the trolley lady, if I am thinking correctly. So Clyde had every right to feel naked.

So, disconnected from the rest of the train? And wandless? Can't wait to see what happens next!

~L. Kelley

Author's Response: Thank you! That dream sequence is actually one that happened to me in real life, tweaked a bit for the HP world. I had a dream that I was hiding in my closet from Nazis (we were reading Night in school at the time) and I was suffocating. When I woke up, I found that the covers were over my head, and that's why I dreamt of suffocation. Weird, huh?

Thank you! Like I said, I really like writing Clyde. I'm glad you like him, too. =)

I really am not completely sure of what canon says about adults on the train. I didn't think about that before I wrote this, to be honest. I just wrote what I wanted to happen =P

Thank you so much! I hope you enjoy it ^_^


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