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Review:Leigh Kelley says:
Hi there :). Sorry this took so long!

With first person writing, I often find rambling characters. I much prefer it when authors jump right into the story, and not let the characters give unnecessary details by way of introducing him or her. Less inner thoughts and more action. Like we have here, for instance. You didn't waste time letting Clyde row us through information that is in no way essential to the plot.

Speaking of Clyde. I love his character. He isn't flat or bland, but actually pretty exciting and well-rounded. His inner thoughts are sometimes amusing, and interesting to read about. He's quite the character. I can't believe that he wouldn't stick around if he had knocked up Jessamine, but I can't say that I am surprised by it. Anything else and he wouldn't be Clyde. Funny how I feel like I know him after one chapter. His voice just shines through so much, and it is so easy to distinguish him from all of the characters I have been reading about lately.

Loved the dialogue. It was easy, natural, and flowed. Your description was nice too; just enough to have the reader able to picture the scene without being crushed by too much detail.

Anyway, I'm interested to read on. I feel that what they read in the paper is related to the plot, and I can't wait to see how. I'm not that big a fan on horror, but with Clyde as the main character, I am sure I'll enjoy the rest of this.

~L. Kelley

Author's Response: Sorry for taking so long to respond!

Thank you! I was very afraid of having a rambling character. I found, though, that with first person, it alleviates the need for lots of description. The story isn't about what's going on around the character so much as it is about the character himself.

Thank you! Clyde has easily become my favorite character to write. He was very fun and interesting because he is so unlike myself in real life. It was fun to sort of live through him with this piece. =) I'm glad you feel like you know him already! That's so great to hear ^_^

Thank you so much! I really appreciate your review ^_^


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