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Review:watchtherainfall says:
The detail of this story is amazing. Not too much, just enough. It adds to the plot, wonderfully. Putting the epilogue first is a strange move, but it works well in this. It tells you what to expect, but it also leaves you with the question of how did they get there? which pushes you forward to read the next chapters. Molly II/Teddy is not something that you see very often, yet the idea of them and the way that you have portrayed them both through this chapter is good.

There are a few grammatical errors in this chapter like starting a sentence with And, and things like that but they do not really matter. A beta can help things like that, if you want. There are a few parts of this chapter that can be a little iffy with the flow. It is a little choppy in places, which forces you to go over and read them again.

I like how you have stayed canon even with this non-canon couple. Mentioning Teddys past love life which could have contained Victoire as the cousin adds a little ooh, what happened to that? kind of air to it. Overall, this is a good start to what looks to be a good story!

Author's Response: thanks so much, staying canon is something I try and do as far as possible. Much more fun when you've got rules to follow. thanks so much for reviewing!

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