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Review:long_live_luna_bellatrix says:
Hi there! This was a fantastic start to a story! You wrote everything amazingly; Scorpius' voice, for example, was really good, and your writing about Aurors in general looked really well thought out. It was fast paced and exciting and overall very enjoyable.

The only thing I thought was a bit off was the lack of reaction to the Dark Mark. Surely the Dark Mark wouldn't have been seen in decades, and would've caused a larger reaction on Rose's part? Even if she was professional, which you proved, just the fact that she found it so hard to deal with arresting her cousin would suggest she might feel more emotion at the sight of such an awful symbol. Just my thoughts.

Very well done! Hope you update soon!

Author's Response: Hiya! Jeez, I'm sorry its taken me ages to respond. I was on vacation, and then school started. Bleh. Anyway, thank you so much! I'm so glad that you think so...I'm so nervous about characterization in 3rd person because I usually write first person. And yay! You liked the fast-paced. This is definitely different for me (as I seem to like to write rom-coms/angst).

Ah yeah...darn. I get so caught up in telling the story I forget to do details sometimes. Especially in third person. You're right, I defintely didn't put in enough reaction there. But I've already started the next chapter, and it goes more in depth with the reaction there to make up for it. Thank you for pointing that out to me, because that is definitely a big part of the story!

Thank you again, hun! :D As always, you rock my socks. :P

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