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Review:WitnesstoitAll says:
hello!! I'm here from the forums. so terribly sorry about the long wait. What with finals and christmas, I've been right busy of late. But fear not! Here I am...

This is a moving and dark one shot. I felt Scorpius' pain in watching Rose die. I really loved the idea of the plot -- a deatheater uprising to punish Scorpius' infidelity to his bloodline.

The description was beautiful in a horrific way. The language was subtle and succint and very suiting of the raw emotion it portrays. Along with this praise, I do have some constructive criticism for you.

Throughout the fic you speak from Scorpius' POV. In this manner, you correctly refer to Lucious as 'grandfather.' However, in one paragraph you refer to him by name. This is a bit jarring and seems inappropriate from the story's POV. It is an easy fic to make though. :)

Also, although I love the passage of time in the fic, the jump from the attack to several days after Rose's death is rather sudden. It could use a bit of a transition of some sort.

Other than those two tidbits, I think this was a brilliant one shot. It was moving and really made me think about the nature and extent of prejudices in general. That is a wonderful feat for an author -- to make your reader think outside the story.

Well done!
Melissa

Author's Response: Ah, don't apologize. Everyone has to have a life.

Thanks for the review -- I particularly enjoyed your comments on the beautific horror. Sometimes the lines blur, and I like to think there's something to be found in it, a message.

I called him Lucius as a retraction from the 'grandfather' symbol -- Scorpius literally pushes this man from his family, turning him into someone detached from his life.

Thanks again!

xE

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