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Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
Yes, yes, look at me all you want. :P It was very much worth it, Gubby, worth all the wait and more.

I think this is the best chapter yet, not in terms of "plot" so much as the language, imagery, and style of this chapter. "Beautiful" is the most appropriate way of terming it, though "clever" is definitely in there as well. I love your diction. It's so subtle, like how the hole on Daphne's cloak sits "smugly" on the hemline. It's not the way one would commonly describe a hole, yet it creates a perfect image of how it would look.

The structure is also perfect in how you've placed Astoria on either side of Draco and Daphne, bookending their segments and setting the tone for the entire chapter. I found that the rhythm of Astoria's narrative carried into the others, and that each section flows into the next so that, even though you're moving spatially and temporally, the narrative doesn't jolt or feel cut off at any moment.

The idea of Draco as Lancelot to Astoria's Lady is one that I don't think occurred to me until seeing how Astoria kept calling him a "knight" as she watched him from the tower. Lancelot did inspire the Lady to "escape" her tower, though I think that's as far as you mean the idea to go? Though I like how Astoria believes that she will die when she leaves the tower, just like the Lady did - how you're re-working Tennyson is amazing to see. :D

I really loved reading this, Gubby, and I hope that you are able to do the rest - whenever you can, so that it turns out just right. It's been a fascinating story to read so far, so thank you for continuing it! ^_^

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