I think this was probably my favourite chapter yet - maybe because I'm on holiday and actually had time to read through it at a proper pace, but probably because it was absolutely lovely.
I like the contrast between Minerva's concentrated effort not to think of Grimm and the fact that Grimm just thought of her constantly - she permeated his every thought (though he did say he wouldn't think of her, he said it an awful lot, thereby thinking of her a lot haha). Anyway, I think it was really reflective of their respective characters - Grimm's tendency to be the pursuer and Minerva's to be the pursued.
Your writing, as always, blows me away and keeps me captivated throughout (even though my attention span is generally zero, I never looked away from the page). You've managed to create such a real character in Grimm in his weaknesses and flaws that adds such a real aspect to him. And you've hit young Minerva spot on - I can definitely see how she came to be the Professor we see in the books, but there is a definite younger element in her that is realistic to her age.
Those last few lines were perfect and made me just ache for the both of them, especially as I know from reading your other Grimm work how this all turns out(ish). I also adored this line: The air around him was still filled with her. It was so perfect and heartbreaking and lovely. It reminds me of poetry, actually, it's really quite beautiful.
Also. The Riddle intrigue. Hm, obviously I know how that turns out but in the context of this story I am quite interested to see how you play it out. Somehow you make it seem unique to you, which is pretty awesome I must say.
Oh, Myrtle =S We all know how that turns out and it just makes this chapter all the more heartbreaking.
Just excellent, excellent work! 10/10.
Author's Response: Wow, Dani! Thank you for this review! Haha, maybe just having more time to read it was enough - my language skills can still sometimes be dense... like mud. :P But I do like the idea of this chapter being the best, even though nothing technically happens and it may be one of the saddest chapters in the story. I enjoyed going deeper into Grimm and Minerva's minds, right into their rawest thoughts and feelings. Because of it, I feel as though I know them better and can tell their voices apart from my own.
Minerva doesn't necessarily succeed at trying to not think about Grimm either, though like you say, it's easier for her not to because she's not so deeply affected (Cupid's arrow hasn't hit her hard enough yet :P). While I know it's cliched to have the male character as pursuer, it does better suit Grimm's personality - Minerva isn't the pursuing type. I get the feeling that she requires a lot of persuasion. XD
It's wonderful that you found this chapter interesting and captivating. I wasn't sure how well it had turned out because not much happened other than their wallowing in the pits of despair (separate pits, of course :P). It's also wonderful that Minerva is coming through as canon, only younger. I think I have a much better grasp on writing her at this age now - she's definitely been one of the biggest challenges of this story.
Ack, that last moment between them! It was pretty torturous, wasn't it? I was close to making them get back together then, but then thought that'd be too quick - better to drag things out a bit longer. :P Thank you for the compliment! I love writing those emotional parts because of the way one can use language to express the character's thoughts and feelings - Grimm especially has a poetic side to him.
I'm trying to build to the canon point while also sticking with my own plot. I think they're melding together neatly at the moment - I've moved the romantic story further away from the canon plot then I initially had planned, but that makes it more plausible (I hope). That's the challenge of fanfiction, though. :D
Thank you for this review! It was fantastic to receive and read over a few times. ^_^ I enjoy hearing your opinions!