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Review:onestop_hpfan18 says:
Hey Georgia! Great story so far, I thought you did a great job introducing the character of Rose. Also, excellent descriptive writing with the emotions in this chapter. The heartbreak Rose is going through seems realistic, as it should, and I only spotted one sentence that read awkwardly;

"...where he to come back because of his child, he would only come to resent it." Perhaps if it started out as "... where he came back..." then it would make more sense and no sound as jumbled.

Overall, great strong start to what looks like a very promising story already. Great job.

Author's Response: Thanks so much for getting to this so quick, Leslie! It's really appreciated, thank you!

I'm glad you thought Rose was realistic - I'm not used to the slow pace of writing novels, so this is definitely an experiment for me!

Thanks for pointing that out - I think I meant "were" instead of "were". It reads better like that :)

Thanks so much, Leslie! I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter.


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