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Review:Leigh Kelley says:
I definitely saw how much of a crush Rafe had on Cala. Seeking her out, being distracted by her fragrance at such. You definitely did a good job at portraying his emotions.

I was a bit surprised when she kissed him, but it doesn't seem unbelievable. We learned that they've known each other for years, so it was probably already building up. Since you're writing from so many POVs, it would be difficult to establish the relationship outside of the one chapter, so in that sense, it doesn't seem rushed at all.

The Raul bit was completely out of the blue, really. But, I like that Rafe defended Cala's honor. I just thought it would be a quick fight, but it was one to the death, and my eyes widened when I saw the end.

I didn't expect that reaction from Cala, but then something semi-clicked in my mind and I had to flip back to the first chapter. I knew that name sounded familiar, and now I realise that Rafe just slaughtered a member of the top five. Is that why Cala ran? Knowing that there will be repercussions for it, and therefore not wanting to be associated with him because of the lashback? Or is it as simple as her not enjoying the killing of others? Ah. Once again, I have no clue, and my curiosity is definitely high, so reading on.

~L. Kelley

Author's Response: Yes, I was hoping that readers would be able to figure out that something had been growing for a little while, at least. Since the kids live so close together, all the time, and Rafe wasn't exactly inconspicuous, I figure Cala would have figured out he had a crush easily enough.

Oh, no, Raul isn't dead, as I can see you figured out from your next review. I think it's more up to the reader why Cala ran, but I figure she didn't like to see the man she had just gotten together with getting so violent over her. Thanks for the review.

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