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Review:Miss Lily Potter says:
Hey! It's Jasmine here, with your review. (:

Firstly, let me say that I really enjoyed this. You managed to capture Luna's oddness, Dean's prejudgement, and his love for her all really well, while in the midst of battle. Good job. (:

You asked about characterization, and I think you got it spot-on. They both seemed totally how they were in the books, and I liked the little artist you put in Dean, it made it so much more interesting.

You write present tense really well. I didn't notice it; it seemed natural, and that's a good thing. Right? (; Also, I liked the way you wrote as 'Dean'. It was, again, interesting, even though I keep using that word. xP

I found a few spelling things, but nothing really major: deatheaters' should be Death Eaters', and Hogshead is two words. But other then that, it was really good. (:

I think your writing style is beautiful. You convey emotion really well, and your description was amazing. I like the idea of Dean being an artist, as I mentioned, because it made for beautiful prose. (:

The Shell Cottage scene was really sweet. I got a tear in my eye at the thought of Luna being sad, you know? But it was realistic, and awesome. (:

I really enjoyed this one-shot. You got Luna pretty much spot-on, which I haven't seen much of. Good job! And feel free to re-request for another story, if you wish. (:

-Jasmine

Author's Response: Sorry that it took me so long to respond. Life's been crazy hectic.

I'm so glad that both dean and Luna's characters seemed realistica and captivating. Luna is such a unique and wonderful canon gem that even attempting to recreate her is a daunting task. lol. There isn't really a whole lot known about Dean, so I made his inner monologue be a bit artistic. :) I'm so glad it worked out well.

Present tense happy dance!!! I was incredibly nervous about this. I was sure that it would come off sounding funny and awkward. I'm glad that you found that it worked for you.

I'll be sure to hunt down those mistakes. :) I didn't have a beta proof-read this one. lol. Your compliments are too sweet! I'm so glad that you enjoy my writing style. I'm not always convinced that I have one. haha. This was an emotional peice and so I'm so happy that it came through my writing.

Luna spot on! That's my favourite compliment I've ever recieved. :) Yay! Thanks so much for this review. It really made my evening better.
-Melissa


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