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Review:Leigh Kelley says:
Good chapter.

I think everything was realistic, here. Cody reacted to Oliver's telling her to shut up just how I would have expected her to. Her stubborn trait keeps springing up, and I don't think you've taken her out of the character you've created for her so far. Of course, I expect growth in the characters as things progress, but so far it's been done very well.

Ah. Good old Rita Skeeter. The woman is still as horrid. It would have been too much to expect the effects of war to change her even in the slightest. I like how she jumped to conclusions about them staying at the hotel. It's exactly the way that she's take one little thing and run away with it. I, like Oliver, expect a good, long article detailing their supposed affair. Poor them.

Before they even arrived I knew that they'd be the last ones. Not only were they the last ones to leave the fields, but an argument, stopping for food, and being delayed by Rita Skeeter all played to hamper their progress.

Oh boy. The two of them sharing that room together? Well that certainly leaves room for more tension.

Your writing seems to be improving with each chapter. You're developing the characters, they're starting to seem more rounded, and everything's moving along at a nice enough pace.

Moving on, then.

~L. Kelley

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