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Review:melian says:
Hi! Here with your review! And SO sorry that it's taken me so long to get to it - things have been a bit crazy of late and things like reviews have fallen by the wayside a bit. But I'll try to make up for it now.

The way I do reviews is that I allow my inner critic to dictate the first bit, and talk about any typos, grammatical errors and the like that I saw. Then I talk about your story.

The thing is, though, that I didn't notice any glaring mistakes. There were a few places where your punctuation wasn't what I would have used, but it was still correct so I'm not going to single anything out. So well done there!

Now, your story. I will say first and foremost that I appreciated your Author's note at the start that gave a bit of background, though the Sirius fangirl in me was disappointed at the announcement that there would be a character called "Black" who wasn't him. Just a comment that's completely off-topic, but I thought I'd throw it in.

Overall I think this is a good start to a story. You've introduced your OCs well and we have enough of their background to get a bit of an understanding of where they're coming from. I liked the idea of a Pestilence being a form of curse or something that is set up on tomb raiders, and also the idea that the number of curses and things set up in the tombs meaning that using magic isnt' really an option. I had wondered why they hadn't just Apparated out when they set the bomb, but you explained that very well later on.

My only comment would be that we don't know when this is set from the first chapter. More info might be coming later on but at the moment I feel the story is without an era. Maybe it doesn't need one - several stories can be seen as timeless - but I feel kinda lost when I don't know when a fic is set. There was a hint with the mention of Hugo but then again it may not be Hugo Weasley, so I'm unsure. (Okay, I just checked the main story page again so now I know, but it wasn't stated in the chapter. Just an observation.)

So, this was a very good first chapter. I'm looking forward to seeing what was in the Treasure room. :) On to chapter 2 ...

cheers, Mel

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