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Review:celticbard says:
Hey Eridanus!
It's celticbard from the TGS Review Exchange, here to take a look at your fic.

Whoa! Poor Molly! Talk about a bad day at work. Even though she was absolutely miserable throughout this first chapter, I thought it was excellent. ^_^ Your writing is solid, your dialogue realistic and your characterizations are simply to die for. Already, I'm getting the sense that Molly II is one complicated young lady. She seems to enjoy her life in Rome, while being conflicted about her lack of a social life. And while I think she had high hopes for her job, her attitude turns sardonic when she learns that she's been laid off. To me, it seems as though she's built a wall about herself, but what exactly is she trying to keep out (or in?).

I also like the fact that she's dedicated to her studies. It shows her maturity and sensibility. And the distance between her and her family makes her that much more relatable. Needless to say, she's won both my sympathy and attention.

This was a great beginning. I really loved it. Onto chapter one!

Best,
celticbard

Author's Response: Hey! It's great to see you ^_^!

Tell me about it, Lol. I'm so glad that you liked it! I was worried that her depression may put readers off because it wasn't exactly fun to read, but it's nice to know that it's still enjoyable. I think I'm going to have some sort of meltdown due to a praise overload from you of all people XD.

I think complicated is probably the perfect word. She likes her independence, but it's not quite all it's cracked up to be. People can't really cope without proper companionship, so Molly is clearly struggling a lot. Hahaha, you have a good picture of what's going on and it's very true about her attitude. She becomes sort of defensive after she's laid off because she doesn't want it to seem like it's hurt her. Not even to herself.

Sometimes the popularity of characters in fan fiction is more of a popularity contest, but with Molly I just wanted to make her seem like a normal person. It also draws a few parallels between her dad's separation from the family, but to a lesser extent.

I'm SOO pleased that you enjoyed it and thank you so much for taking the time to give me your feedback ^_^.

Jane



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