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Review:Jane_Volturi says:
Hi Deana

Sorry it took me so long to read and review this. Ok, so I'll get the negatives out of the way first 9there were only a few things) hate pointing things out like this but I do have to be honest, otherwise there's be no point in me reviewing.

It was just Draco's characterization, you made him alot more stronger and mature in this, it was good, don't get me wrong but I just think, at this stage of the story he is going to be the complete opposite. This is Voldemort we're talking about, he's going to be a wreck, he's going to be anxious, annoyed, pointing the most pointless things out. This is his time to shine, for too long Harry Potter's has pbeen taking the spot light, for too long he's envied him and now this is his chance to prove himself to be more powerful and just as capable as Harry Potter. I don't think his persoanlity is going to be exactly understanding, it's going to be more on the brink of sickness, he's going to be trying to convince himself that he can do it, not the other way around, he's going to be reffering to St Potter, Mr perfect always getting what he wants. He's going to be the same arrogant, immature Draco Malfoy he's always been, exept this time he really has issues.
You really did well with him though, even though his character was a little different, I really like how you made him argue with himself, and that little voice of conscience he has in his ear all the way through this.
I especially loved his dialogue with Myrtle, well done by the way, Myrtle was perfect. Shje's usually very difficult to write because she's just so whiny and annoying but you portrayed her so well in this, and I love how Draco responded to her, their conversation was perfect.
I really liked the story in this, it kept me intrigued the whole way through beacuse I've never seen this scene in the book beforem, it's good to see things from Draco's perspective for once.

' “Sooo,” she says to me in a prying manner, “why exactly are you in here crying, hmmm? It‘s not too often that I find boys crying in the bathroom! Especially not handsome boys.” She winks at me and I cringe inwardly. This is not how I imagined spending my morning. '

Lol, that bit made me laugh for some reason.

Writing was amazing, I wish I could write like you, you have a talent for creating an atmosphere, i always struggle with things like that.

I really hope this does great in this challenge, 'twas amazing and I thoroughly enjoyed reading it

10/10

Katie

Author's Response: Ok, so I'll confess that I could NOT wait for you to read this one. It just felt SO weird, writing something and then posting it without consulting you first, lol! So I was a bit nervous to get your review on it, cuz I wasn't sure what you'd think about it...

I totally do get what your saying about Draco's character tho. I guess I'm just too used to writing the angsty 'AiNFiL&W Draco' lol! However, in my mind, this was towards the late-middle/near-end of the school year when he was beginning to run out of both time and options. I guess I kinda pictured him to be a little bit more soft at that point. Sure, he'd act tough out in public, but when he was alone and by himself, I just imagined him as acting different, that's all...

Oh my goodness, Myrtle, lol! I had such a difficult time with her. At first, I didn't like ANY of it. I put writing this off for so long, and I was just about to scrap the whole thing because I was NOT satisfied with her at all. I mean, she was so incredibly tricky to write! And then, I go ahead and put the story up anyways and whaddya know? EVERYBODY loves her, lol! Geeze!! I simply LOVE IT when that happens, haha!! So thank you very much for saying that you thought their conversation was perfect! That comment right there totally made my day!! *hugs* & Hehe, and that line makes me laugh a lot too!! :)

Despite all the complications and frustrations, I really had a lot of fun writing this one-shot. Missing Moments from the HP books are always a lot of fun to read & write. Thank you so much for all the compliments hun, and thanks for the 10! I am so happy you enjoyed it Katie!! =)


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