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Review:dracos_hotter says:
Here from the forums!

A very dramatic start. Attracts my attention like money does a broker.

Personally, I wouldn't build up a picture of a character using photos from films, I'd describe them -- I can't help but feel you took the easy way out there.

Grammar is near perfect, I salute you.

The plot is fresh, and I'll give you the fact I've never seen anything like it. I'm just wondering how it ties in with Harry Potter. Besides the whole magic thing. I guess I'd have to read on to find out.

All in all, a great start. Not exactly my sort of thing, though.

xE

Author's Response: Hey there! Thank you very much for taking up my request. The idea of a cast list actually helps me visualize the characters, and I thought I'd add it in to see if it had the same effect for other readers or writers, for example. I don't personally feel as though it was the 'easy way out', so to speak, because it doesn't particularly interfere with the text itself (where I do occasionally describe the characters), but as I don't like to go into great length about what a character is physically like, I chose to instead mention snippets about their physicality - example: Grace's black hair, Black's suntanned skin, etc.

Thank you! It's often a weak point of mine, so it's great that it's getting much better.

Aha, I'm glad you found it original. :) It ties into Harry Potter much more than the first chapter gives away. I'm sorry it wasn't your sort of thing but I am very thankful that you took the time to read and review.

Thank you very much for your thoughtful review! :)
XOXO, Kalina


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