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Review:Burke says:
Here with your review, you weren't first in line but when I saw the summary I couldn't resist just giving it a read.

Glad I did.

This is great, I enjoyed it immensly.


Flow-
It is amazing that you were able to spread a few moments over this many words and make it seem normal, it doesn't seem drawn out at all, yes it is slow, but I think in this circumstance it would be one of those moments when everythin is going so slowly and despite that (as demonstrated by Draco's inability to say to Pansy what he wanted) there is not enough time. This story gripped me and I could not stop reading, and I re-read it several times before reviewing because I enjoyed it so much.

Grammer-
Really great as far as I could see, nothing stood out and it all seemed really marvelous. I love your choice of words in this piece and the way you have written it.

Characterisation-

Pansy-
I think Pansy gets more flack then she deserves (probably on account of how many people are in love with Draco) but I think you've done a much more honest and realistic and canon approach to her character than I have ever read before, I really liked the way that you portrayed her, it seemed fitting and realistic for her. I always wondered what happened to Pansy after the Battle and why Draco married Astoria- your story here is an answer to that question that I really think is fitting and I think this is what I will keep in my mind as what happened to poor Pansy, yes I think I will. Thanks, now I know what happened to her. :-)

Draco-
You mentioned that you weren't sure if I would like your version of Draco but its very canon, very realistic and very good so you needn't have worried at all. I like how, despite Pansy dying, he continues to think about all the things he has done wrong and in the end we see it is because he is blaming himself for everyone dying, Pansy especially in this moment, but in reality everyone. He is putting an immense load on him and re-evaluating his life and by denying his feelings for Pansy until it is too late almost seemed like the end of his past and the beginning of his future, his new life where he would try to be less 'the arrogant, popular boy who is the arch-enemy of Harry Potter' and more 'Draco' whoever Draco turns out to be.

I really enjoyed this, gret work on an amazing story, please keep writing things that are dark, realistic and meaningful like this and let me know when you have, I'd love to read them and will happily review.

Thanks for requesting, you did a great job.
10/10

Author's Response: Burke I have no idea WHY it has taken me so long to write this response. I feel low brow for it, and have not a single excuse! Sorry about the lapse in time, but here goes!

Can you guess what my first line is? Big rocks are very dangerous, you know? HAHA! Didn't see that coming did you? (sorry, I'm being weird I know). Anyway, THANK YOU! Duh!

My arrogance is swelling after reading this review! And because of your kind words I think I'll write another quick, dark and tragic one shot along these lines.

Thank you for your encouraging words about Pansy's characterization and Draco's! I always wondered about Pansy. We know what Draco's issues were. But why was Pansy so . . . mean? Did she have problems, skeletons, issues? I tried to explore that here, throwing in minor hints and things.

Thank you very, very much Burke, I appreciate it so much!

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