Wow. What can I say? This story literally brought tears to my eyes. The emotion in this story was unrelenting. This isn't some light, fluffy thing . . . it's darker and difficult, and you don't let the readers escape from it.
The first scene, featuring John, was heartbreaking. His anguish, rage, and impotence came through so clearly. I'm very impressed that you managed to convey it without straying into sentimentality. I was not quite as moved by the middle section, but what impacted me most was the brochure Sirius brought.
The final part featuring Teddy was almost as sad for me as the first segment. I was really moved by the idea of Teddy being somewhat affected by the moon as well and paying tribute (in his words) to his father--not that I think that's necessarily the most healthy thing to do all your life, but still. And the bits about the Marauder's Map and the Invisibility Cloak and Teddy's memories of Harry . . . gah. Like I said, I was moved.
Normally I'm not crazy about parenthetical statements, but in this case, I have to say they definitely added to the story. You pulled them off very well. You've written an amazing story here.
Author's Response: This HPFFSAD thing has taken me by surprise! How absolutely lovely. I was so thrilled to get a few extra reviews.
Sadly, this story has flown in under the radar, never really got much attention, and I haven't been so hung up on it as to request reviews. So it has barely any. But I am really happy you liked it, because when the idea first hit me I thought it was great, and then when writing it turned out to be a little harder, and I couldn't express what I was trying to say.
I really like writing Remus's dad. I wrote him a little bit in my novel, and the way it's been implied that the parents supported Remus, his dad must be a pretty awesome person. I myself have a 5 year old son, so I tried to put myself in his shoes. I couldn't imagine hearing your child screaming in pain and misery, and not be able to do a thing about it. That part actually wasn't even hard to write at all! I didn't want it to be a sentimental sob story, I did try to be matter-of-fact with it.
I'm not surprised you weren't moved by the middle section. I think that was part of where I got lost on what I wanted during writing. My intention was to show what the full moon was like for each of the Lupins, and I guess I was just trying to show that (whilst his father despaired and Teddy was comforted) it really wasn't a terrible thing for Remus when his friends were there.
To be honest, I hadn't even considered that it wouldn't be healthy for Teddy to do such a thing! Haha. But then, he probably only started it in recent years. I wonder when he would even be told of his father's condition, anyway? Too young and he might be afraid, and I don't think Harry would want that for Remus. Well, anyway, he can't sleep during those nights because he just can't, so I figured thinking about the reason for that (and coming to respect it) would be natural! :D
Well, again, I'm glad you liked it. The parenthesis is something I've done some experimenting with in all of my stories. Sometimes I overdo it, I can admit that. But sometimes it seems like it adds a little, so I decided to give it a shot here.