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Review:RonsGirlFriday says:
I have been intrigued about this story ever since you mentioned it in your Author's Note in Winner Takes All. You probably know I'm not generally a fan of Dramiones, but I occasionally read them because there are certain authors who can handle writing that ship - and since everything you write is phenomenal, I figured this is bound to be one of the best, if not the best, Dramiones ever.

(All of that was meant to be flattering and not pressure- or anxiety-inducing, by the way.)

I could tell right away that you put such clear and deliberate thought into crafting Hermione's character at this stage in her life. The entire first paragraph of this chapter is wonderful, and I think it just about sums up the whole chapter, and Hermione's entire situation.

I think you've elicited a couple of poignant facts about the post-war Hermione. First, as horrifying and trying as their adventures were, it would be very difficult to transition from that life, to a life of Ministry paperwork - even meaningful paperwork dealing with rights and liberties. To be honest, I can see Hermione being happy with a steady, ritualized can of work and life that many would see as tedious - but I can also see her evolving into the person you've described here. Her character here is engaging because it's so true and relatable.

The second thing is the fact that Harry and Ron are Aurors and continue to go on adventures together - that seriously changes the group dynamic, as now they have a bond in which Hermione can't really share, even though she may have shared it in their younger years. Along with boredom and discontent, I can imagine there might also be feelings of alienation there.

I think this kind of character development is crucial to a good Dramione, because the problem I have with Dramiones is that they're usually unrealistic and unbelievable. But when you take into account this kind of character evolution, you can begin to see how the Dramione scenario might be remotely possible.

Looking forward to reading on!

10/10

Author's Response: Wow, long review! Thank you very much for this, Melanie - it was such a surprise to see this review and I appreciate how much detail you've put into it. ^_^

Haha, the best Dramione? I don't think I can handle that pressure :P especially since I can't take this story seriously at all. I've tried to write new chapters, but it's turning into a farce instead of the deeper type of story I'd been hoping for (more like Winner Takes All - maybe I have to finish that story before I can move on with this one). I can get Draco and Hermione separately written, but together, they seem so discordant in personalities.

You've referred to my favourite aspects of this first chapter, how Hermione isn't able to cope with the changes in her life, even this long after the war has finished. A lot of my plans for this story deal with her trying to come to terms with many things in her life, including her torture at Malfoy Manor. Perhaps if I focus on her character more, I can return to the serious tone of this first chapter.

Let me know what you think of the next two chapters! It would be wonderful to see how they compare to this first one so that I can think of how to continue writing this story. :D


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