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Review:fatality says:
Hai love, this is fatality from the forums.

First things first, the flow is clean. I love the simplicity of this fic and how your message was read clearly. I also enjoyed the what ifs. In fact, its human nature and partially a defense mechanism that Cho feels the way she feels and thinks whatever runs through her mind. I love the endless possibilities and how Cho stays canon and alive throughout the story with that as its muse.

However, I felt like a spark was missing. Or maybe there was an emotion you forgot to capture? Cho is a character we donít really hear of, but there is definitely more to her than just her attraction for Harry. Itís already been read that Cho doesnít believe that Ginny belongs with Harry and that she regrets losing Harry, but how come you didnít take some emotional risk and wander through her thoughts with how she felt when she heard of Harry and Ginny, become official? How come you did not speak of what she liked in Harry? Or for her love for Cedric? Or her reason for still believing she and Harry had a chance?

All in all, good job. This was a wonderful read.

Author's Response: Hey! Thank you so much for reviewing. (:

I'm glad you liked those things. (: And I didn't put the others in because, honestly, I only had 500 words. I wanted to capture one single plot, if you will, and that would have taken too much for the challenge it was in. However, I can see where you're coming from, and I'll keep that in mind.

A wonderful read? Thank you so much! :D
-Jasmine


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