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Review:harrylilyjames says:
Hey!
Here with my review :)

I just have to say I really like the beginning with the poem, it was nice and started the story lovely.

When Dom is having her rant about thinking about him, it seems a bit too much, normal people[lol, that sounds wrong :p] wouldn't ramble so much like the way she did, plus she was crying so would either give up when she got too out of breath or he would of stopped her beforehand.

I don't get her comment 'This is a new beginning. But it's an end, as well, whether I know it or not.'- she does know, because she's thought of it. I think you meant something along the lines of, "wether I wanted to believe it or not"- which makes more sense.

Really liked the fact you made Vic talk in French, that was a nice touch.

Awe, the way you described Victoire's and Dom's relationship was sooo darn cute! I wanted to hug her.

He's a scribe?? Omg!! That's sooo sad. :( But how did his parent's homeschooled him, what did they teach him if he's a scribe? They were both magical, so most likely didn't hace a clue about 'muggle' subjects.

Just a little thought for you...would it not be better as a short story? So you could add in parts of the the years he went without him and how she tried to love someone else, but how those relationships fell to pieces. Just an idea, because it skipped a lot of time. [5 years!]

I must say, that ending was just beautiful. Really liked it. Overall it was a lovely story and really enjoyed it :)

Author's Response: Wowee...thank you for such a dedicated review! It was truly extraordinary to read!
Alright. First things first.
I understand your comment about the rant. I'll be sure to look over that part and maybe re-word it. Thanks for pointing that out.
Dom's comment on it being a beginning and an end 'whether I knew it or not' was because she didn't know he was going to leave, but I think your comment makes sense as well. I'll be looking over that as well.
I tried to make the story authentic with the whole French shabang and what not :)
Yah I felt bad for Lys, too. I think it would be pure awful to be a squib in a magical family. I guess there is some confusion there with the 'homeschooling' and all, but I think I'll just leave that to your imagination, because I think it would take too long to explain.
And I'll be sure to think about your short story idea. It's something to think about, you're right, because five years is a long time.
I liked the ending, too. :) Thanks for the praise.
Again, thanks so so much x's a million for the insighful and thoughful review. It meant a lot!
~EnnaBellaPotter


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