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Review:Alopex says:
I've read a few of these stream of consciousness challenge pieces now, and overall I've been rather impressed by the results. It's also interesting for me to note that all the pieces I've read have had a sort of dreamy feeling, often with sky and/or ocean imagery. Very interesting.

So, as I said, the overall feel and mood of this story was very dreamy, floaty, and even melancholy. It really was an "under the moonlit and starry sky" story. I enjoy this dreamy writing style. I also thought your story flowed well. You moved well from one description to another, like a stream of water. The repetition (another common theme among the stream of consciousness pieces, which isn't surprising at all) helped with that flow, because the repeated words and phrases served as bridges of sorts.

In your review request, you also inquired about characterization. I'm not finding much to say about it. I did find the part where the character was introduced to be a bit jarring in comparison with the rest of the story. I know this story is written in the first person and does describe Minerva's thoughts (if thoughts are the right way to describe it), but I don't really feel very acquainted with her as a character. Obviously, Voldemort (or Tom Riddle, I guess) is the other character, and I can see Minerva having some of those regretful thoughts (assuming T/M or a crush at least), but the strong description in this story overpowered the characterization.

I still thought it was a good story, and I would never have thought to mention the characterization if you hadn't asked.

Author's Response: I've noticed that too, or at the least they tend to be outside. Maybe because stream of consciousness is sort of thoughts in their natural form it's quite easy to link to nature. It is interesting XD
That's good you wouldn't have thought to comment on it, it can't detract from the story too much then :P I was just worried she would seem completely ooc because I've never written her before and she's a strange character to write.
Thank you so much for taking the time to review *hugs*


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