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Review:Alopex says:
I hadn't realized until this chapter that this story was AU (that's what I get for skipping summaries and warnings). I knew it wasn't following canon exactly, but I was never expecting Harry Potter to come barging into the Minister's hideaway cottage. I also was not expecting the Ministry to know of the Horcruxes! You know, I think I'm a lot more comfortable when I don't think about what all the government knows--in general and about me.

Anyhoo. I'm just trying to imagine where Scrimgeour could be hiding that has a time zone two hours behind Britain's. I sort of assumed all of the UK had the same time zone, but I could be wrong about that. I never really thought about it. So he must be someplace else, and if the time is faster in Britain, he must be to the west. Where does that put him? Greenland?

Ok, moving on to something more relevant . . . how about that Kingsley. You know, I am quite impressed by that fellow. I'd promote him for sure if I was his boss. In reading this story, it becomes completely obvious why/how he became Minister later.

I suppose it's about time to address the concern you mentioned in your review request about the story spreading out here and possibly becoming confusing. I agree that the story is fanning out. You've certainly introduced a couple of twists that I was not expecting. In fact, I'm finding it extremely difficult to predict anything or decide what to expect. It seems there's a lot of intriguing going on here, and sorting everything out would be quite a task. Having only pieces of plots and plans here and there, I find it impossible to figure out what's going on behind the scenes. I understand the actions that are occuring. I simply mean I'm not privy to whatever planning and secret plots are floating around.

That's likely your goal for this point in the story. You don't want your readers to know who all is a bad guy and just how bad they are, who owes whom a favor, etc. So, to answer your question, no, I don't think it's too confusing so far. You seem to be handling this complicated plot and web of character relationships very well so far.

Feel free to re-request at any time. I have enjoyed reading this story.

Author's Response: Yes, it's AU, haha. It's only different in 2 main parts: how the 2nd war is fought [battles and who dies/how they die] and the role of the Trio. The Ministry shuts the "children" out in this story, which is why I started it - to see how the adults could make do without the kids. I have lots of OCs, obviously, but I'd like to think I keep the canon characters relatively intact. Of course, those are 2 VERY BIG deviations from canon, but, oh well. =]

Yay, unpredictability! I have to admit, I take very random things and stick them into the plotline as it pleases me, though they all serve a purpose in the end. Hopefully, I was able to bring some of the plots and pieces together by Chapter 13, the last chapter I posted. I know how aggravating it can be to read a mystery that keeps dropping clues without tying up loose ends until the very end. >.< But I'm glad you like it so far, thanks for the review, and I'll be sure to do so! =]

~Gabby


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