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Review:brunetteweasley says:
Hello, this is brunetteweasley for the review you requested.

I must say, I love how you made me empathize with Dominique. The reader felt her pain through the piece. It is very hard to have an author relate to a character, and you did a very good job. And, you also left the reader wanting for more. I wanted to know what happened next, and how Dominique and Teddy started this affair.

But, the main flaw that I see in your story is the grammar. It's not a huge issue, just a little things here and there (especially in capitalization). I would suggest getting one of the wonderful betas on the forum, just to make the story a little bit cleaner.

Can't wait to see what else you have up your sleeve for this story.


Author's Response: I am so, so glad that you're empathizing with poor Dominique! I dunno, lots of people don't like her because Victoire/Teddy was hinted upon in the Epilogue, and I guess they want to stick with canon (even though it's really not!) I'm so glad that you can really feel her depression - I wrote a bunch of this story when I was in a bad mood. xD Perhaps that worked? I think for the next chapters I'll have a playlist of sad music on in the background.

Oh, and just to get it out there, maybe I'll have to do some edits to make it a bit more clear. Teddy and Victoire were never a solid couple; a very off-and-on relationship. Dominique was really just a total rock for Teddy during everything, and so that sort of developed on the "off" times. But she really just loved him all along. Or at least, that's how it works in my brain. xD

Ugh. I know. My grammar is rather atrocious. I think I will take your suggestion; I can definitely tell I need some help with the grammar!

Thanks so much for the spectacular review!

- Zinny

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