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Review:Alopex says:
You are the first person to ever request a piece written in the second person. I guess that's because it's not very common. I have to confess that I am not a big fan of second-person writing. I find it confusing, personally. Every time I read "you," I have a hard time wrapping my brain around it and picturing what's going on . . . sort of being inside and outside the situation at the same time, you know?

Anyway. Despite the second person (which I don't think I will ever like no matter how well written), I thought this was a unique start to a story. I have to admit the second person writing does make the story stand out. It grabbed my attention.

I wouldn't say there was a whole lot in this chapter that surprised me, plotwise. I was, however, surprised about Dominique providing the inspiration (or template or script or whatever you want to call it) for Teddy's proposal to Victoire. As Dominique points out, what irony.

I don't know if this was intentional or not, but I enjoyed the symbolism with the red wine spilling to the floor. Obviously, readers will associate red with blood, which is in keeping with the Romeo and Juliette aspect you introduce. Furthermore, that she spills the wine shows (to me) more than any of the other things she mentions (the wedding dress, etc.) that her dreams and illusions have been spilled or shattered, so to speak, and that she herself played a hand in it.

Author's Response: This is going to sound very strange, but I'm actually really glad that you're not a fan of second person! I wanted to see if, for those readers who don't necessarily enjoy this type of narration, the story would still be enjoyable despite how it's being told. I'm quite fond of the uniqueness of second person myself, so I'm rather glad that it stuck out to you!

I completely agree. I see Dominique/Victoire/Teddy fics a lot, most of which have Victoire getting to be the bride, but I wanted to start this fic off with a rather common conflict - unrequited love. The general topic of the character, I knew, wasn't going to be very surprising, but I'm glad I surprised you with Dominique's proposal bit. I suppose it was my own little twist to make the chapter unlike loads of Dom/Ted/Vic stories out there.

Aha! I am so glad that you caught onto the red wine bit! You're right, there was some symbolism going on there. :)

Anywho, thank you so very much for the absolutely fantastic review!!


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