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Review:timeturner says:
This was an extremely creative piece of fiction. I have to admit, the characterizations seem completely off from canon neither of the characters being what we expect them to be. But, I rather like it when authors take characters and make them their own. You will probably take some heat from readers for the straying you've done but I think the creative approach to changing the characters the way you want them to be worked well. The story itself is one that lends itself to a novella length and I think it would showcase your writing more (and the characters you've created) much more clearly than this one shot.

Here, you are forced to move so quickly because of the one shot (as opposed to a longer piece) that I think we are missing out on viewing the best of your writing. That's no fault of your own, of course, I just think a longer piece that develops these characters even more deeply would help provide readers a better change to explore you as a writer and perhaps give them insight into the characters you created.

I do say you created because, really, even though these are canon characters they read much more like original characters since they are so different than what we know. Again, that's not a bad thing in my book and I enjoyed the plot and scenes you created for them.

Author's Response: wow. Just wow :D .

I think that Padma, even though she is a canon character, gives the writers a lot of space to experiment because we don't really get to know her. So I just behaved with her like with an OC. And Ron...well, yes, he's not how people would imagine him, he's not even what I imagine him to be because, honestly, I can't picture him with anyone other than Hermione :D so this was a real challenge and to make him actually fit with Padma...a hard thing to do.

I agree that this has potential to be longer, the characters have their reasons, have their stories, to be the way they are and in this one-shot I didn't have room to explain that. Currently, I have a lot of plot bunnies and very little time to write anything but I might expand this to be a short story, or a novella.

Thanks for the wonderful review, I'm glad that you weren't put off by the characters and their behaviour :) .

~ Kristina


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